>>502744
I haven't got anything recent, but I can send you this creative piece I wrote for the area of study of belonging when I was in high school.

I got 100%, so it would be interesting to see what you think of it.

>>502774
hmmm, alright. This should be interesting...

Just remember that I'll be looking at structure, I can't really critique by genre

>>502786
No problem. The word limit was 800 so it's pretty choppy. Give me any feedback. I handle critique very well.

Just keep in mind it was written for the concept of belonging.

I'll email it now.

>>502744
Are you sure that email address is correct? The email I just tried to send failed.

Email sent. It's a short poem, shouldn't be too much work for ya. Thanks in advance!

Just get the edit - shit is legit. Thanks!

alright, just a heads-up that I've now recieved two pieces of writing and won't be taking any more. Looks good overall

>>503015

Wait, scratch that. I just read over the edits and they seem a bit - mindless. What exactly are your qualifications, OP?

>>503036

Also, you fucked up one of the lays/lies - only one needed changing.

>>503036
>>503045
>butthurt and can't take criticism

>>503022
Did you take the 1000 word creative writing piece?

>>503053

>can't take crappy, one-worded criticism that isn't very constructive and is grammatically wrong

fix'd it for ya

>>503067
>expecting expert criticism on 4chan

>>503067
>>503077
>>503053

I don't need a personal army, folks.

Yeah, I was unsure about the second lay/lies alteration. The poem itself seemed fine, It was more of a perception issue really. Feel free to ignore anything that seems stupid to you.

>>503064
yes, I did. Just sent out my reply

>>503140
Thanks Jonah! Most of your comments were correct, but some parts I feel the repetition you said to change was to add effect.

Again, you analyzed based on structure, not technique.

>>503156
fair enough,I'm a little critical of indvidual paragraphs as opposed to the whole.
glad you appreciated the criticism

>>503175
I replied to your email, by the way.

alright, I've got some time on my hands so I'm willing to do another . Bumping for interest

Prole, do you ever do this for Zine submissions or is it just editing and out?

>>504170
Only on request. I don't wanna scare away applicants who think I'm gonna dissect their work. And, I probably don't have time to do die-hard critiques of every piece

>>504173
Say I set in a submission and asked for some feedback, but nothing in-depth, just a general feeling for the piece overall, how would I go about asking that in the email?

>>504183
hmmm....
I usually deal with poetry, horror, and technical.

However if you were to specifically ask for Prole to look over your work, I'd give you a line-edit. If you don't like my crtiques, you can probably ask for Nick or Lindlar to look it over.

does that help?

>>504203
Very much so. Thanks.

>>504223
no problem, just be sure to say how pretentious you want me to be.

Can I email you something that I did for my creative writing in school?
I've never written anything before, but I was quite happy with it. I've never written anything since actually.
I don't know what grade it got, but for the whole course I got a B.

>>504237
sure, I'm alright with that. Send away

>>504247
I just sent it. Thanks.