Fuck yeah, ZWG.

inb4 300 replies

What I've read so far is good. Well done.

When is the deadline for entries for the next edition?

Dear ZWG taskforce: Do you happen to have someone in the team which is savy in the art of making websites?

>>399806

How is the site lookin?

>>399825
We've already closed the second issue, we're now taking submissions for the third one.

>>399830
Make the first cover slightly, around 25% bigger than the second one.

>>399829
Kinda.

Hell yeah!

>>399830
Looks pretty good from here.

>>399829

I wouldn't call myself "savvy" lol

>>399832
>No greentext narrative


:(

Also, for people wondering how we'll archive the threads:
We're using sup/tg/ system to archive them in our website.

>>399851
Submit some for the next issue, bro.

>>399770
>>399772
How are you going to get all of those writers to revise their stories in time for a monthly release? I just don't see it happening in beta, like you guys have kinda latched on to. I think it'd be better to have all submissions critiqued in a separate critique group, have all the critiques sent to the authors, and perhaps incorporate a rating system (good food for the trolls, but the rating would have to come with a written response, and any non-serious ratings could be easily thrown out. Then when a piece gets a high enough average rating, use those pieces in the next issue.

To expand on the rating system idea, perhaps you could require a certain word count for critiques, say.. 300 words or so. Less for poetry and shorter pieces. Then you can easily read through and disregard the illegitimate critiques and ratings.

Still say format changes so more work will be read

>>399863
If you can put it out in multiple formats it might help. A lot of people just plain hate PDFs.

The website could be designed to handle the critiques as well as the final release.. That could be cool.

>>399838

25% bigger
how about now?

How many downloads have you had?

>>399873
Perfect.

>>399874
Good question.

I spotted a typo in my own story lol, but it's all gravy. The zine looks great, I think.

>>399860
A potential problem with this is the thing becomes too cumbersome,and we spend all our time e-mailing updates and waiting for responses.

It's a good idea, but would require a small/co-ordinated group to be a benefit as opposed to a deadweight

>>399872
The site is more of a medium between releases, and a place for people to download everthing.

Plus, we're gonna send a registration form this week so all authors can have their pages on the wiki, then people'll be able to contact them and give direct feedback.

>>399869
They are very CUMBERSOME

Did anyone happen to read Dream Envoy? I don't think it's very good myself, but it wouldn't mind hearing what you guys thought was enjoyable and what wasn't. (Or, if it was all horrible, what not to write about in the future.)

Both "Second Sunset" and "Dark Horse Sense" used the phrase "golden fields" independently. Interesting.

>>399883
Or a proper website to handle all that. It won't be quick moving from critique to publish, but the quality will be higher. This is my ultimate goal.

>>399896
Second Sunser aka Farm

how come "farm" is now "second sunset"?

I like the new title better, but why the change?

>>399894
This

Why we need literary analysis

>>399913
Author's request.

What about using the Wiki Registration thingie so people can give direct feedback to the authors they hate/love and keep on giving free publishing to all authors? We the editors can surely ask for more polish on rough works, but we definitely can't just thumbs down someone.

>>399894
Subject wasn't particularly good or bad. Writing was very clunky, bad sentence structure, lots of elementary grammatical mistakes and generally undeveloped.

I'm thoroughly enjoying this publication. If you guys get bigger, you should eventually think of printed copies, or at least advertising the publication on the internet.

>>399932
Sooner or later we'll advertise it all over the other boards, this is kind of a 4chan thing y'know.

About printed copies, we're protected by CC, so people can print and distribute them freely as long as they don't profit with it.

Talking about profit, I would like to reestate that we the editors agreed in donating all money we hipotetically get from this to Wikimedia, unless anon claims otherwise.

>>399926
And why not? You'd be doing your authors a disservice not to if their writing is not "good." Perhaps I'm missing the point of this whole thing, but I think you have something started here that could be much more than it currently is. Build a proper website with a critique group and a publishing spot, and require the authors to do a certain number of critiques for their own stories to be critiqued. Then when the pieces get rated high enough, they get published. Takes time, no one gets "shot down" and you get to be a part of a publication with a little more legitimacy and quality.

What are people's favorites? I'm liking Sick, Second Sunset and Lazarus.

>>399958
Im enjoying the creepypasta

>>399958
Second Sunset, SICK, Lazarus, Poletard and A Dark Day are the current all-stars.

I like Revolution, Sick and About Being Locked Up

>>399914

that is difficult ground to tread. A critique group with no real credentials could turn ugly and run dictator, ruining anon interest in the project.

On the other hand, a ratings system is also exploitable by trolls and does not provide any real feed-back.

While admittedly critique is something the zine lacks, it is very difficult to figure out just how to implement it.

>>399874

Stats aren't in as of yet. This will be posted tomorrow.

>>399958

I liked Revolution and On Being Locked Up. Currently reading The Lay of King David.

I skipped over Lazarus because I'm not big on poem format but if you say that it's good, I'll have to go back to it

>>399986

I'm sure that somebody will think of something more suitable.

Damn, I wish I could have submitted for the second issue. You guy should advertise more often when submissions are nearing close.

>>399991
Same here, I skipped the poetry section entirely, but gave Lazarus a chance while going through SF and it was pretty good. SF is pretty strong, actually, Untitled and Second Sunset were both good.

>>400011
Given how much of a shitstorm they get from trolls while advertising at all...

>>399991
It's a little unusual,yes. Written in a semi-traditional epic poem format, probably should have been sorted into poetry.

>>399999
If there are dedicated editors who are willing to read every critique before they're sent to the author, it would work. I'd be willing to help out with that.

>>400016
While true, I'm such a scatterbrained person that I completely forget when a deadline is coming up. I have writing ready to submit, I just need to email it in when I get a chance. I would have liked to have become a regular submitter with at least one article per zine.

>>400026
It's early days yet, dude. Start pumping them out and nobody will mind that you missed the second issue.

>>400030
rabble rabble rabble

I'll get on that. I've got some very light editing to do to a second piece, so maybe I'll submit two for issue 3 to make up for it/

>>399894
I find it good. It's average, but the good kind. The way the end ties with the beginning is a great concept. My advice is that you're a little too verbose in your scene descriptions. Take these for examples
>>Blinding fluorescent light dripped from the ceiling
>>Soft, iridescent dust swelled and trembled
in the air, making formless, indiscernible shapes around me
It's a bit heavy to digest. I think you have to choose between two: many commas, or long words. If you have both then you are putting the reader's head into a microwave.

Does the ZWG have an IRC

>>400051
We should make one

>>400051

No, but that is a good idea.

I'm so submitting to the next issue, oh my god.

Also, I'm sure you've answered this question several times, but how does one preserve their creative rights to their pieces?

>>399894
hmm, it's a fairly interesting conclusion. However, Dream-sequences are just about the oldest trick in the book, and no real action appears to outside of these blatant dream sequences. There is no question of reality, because you've already given the reader plenty of warning when they reach a dream sequence. I ended up feeling like I was reading a novelization of nightmare on elm street, to be honest.

Additionally, very little seems to provoke any sense of paranoia in the viewer. So when the character suddenly thinks that someone is watching, it just seems completely random.

dude that made the second issue cover here. you want me to make more or what? haven't heard much via email.

Reading over it, it seems my review was kinda out of place with the rest of the zine.

Maybe I should opt for something more traditional?

>>400075
more traditional and better written would be good

>>400075
Having a review seemed like an interesting idea, honestly. It makes things more diverse

I'd like to know if anyone read I See You. Aside from the atrocious title, I'd really like to get some feedback on it. It was kind of a one-off piece I wrote for a class, so I'm curious as to how it was received by Anon. I'd be really appreciative of anything you guys can offer.

Authors could probably ask for critiques in separate threads later, while providing the download link so that the entire publication gets more exposure, and the author gets feedback.

>>400080
To each his own, bro.

>>400089
Diversity is the spice of life and everything. I could probably write something more traditional too. We'll see. I've got a little while yet.

>>400117
yeah, this would be a nice idea.

>>400117
You're probably right. Still, I'd like to ask in a thread that's got some exposure to the related material already, rather than starting up a new thread.

>>400098

Well, I think that it was well written- enough to keep me reading till the end. Although the plot itself was eh. Needs more tension.

The part where he bashed the guy's face was bit confusing. Partially since he was using a... Camera light?

God Tier:
Revolution
On Being Locked Up
Meh Tier:
Basically everything else
Shittier than shit:
The Collector.
seriously, what was that.

"A dirigible droned overhead, raining ash."

Wasn't certain about the story at all until that last line. That was just wonderful.

>>400141
Thanks. I was thinking of the removable light element to any DSLR. An old example would be something like in Rear Window. But, noted.

Any comments on "Snow"?

I know since this IS 4chan, it prob won't faze anybody but eh.

>>400179
Funny you say that, I just got done reading it. I was confused at the first paragraph, but I saw what you were getting at. Clever.

GOD TIER
Sick
Second Sunset
Poletard
Revolution

TOP TIER
Lazarus
A Dark Day
ISEEYOU

HIGH TIER
Creepypasta
On Being Locked Up

GOOD TIER
Manual for a Modern Day Living
Snow
The Dolors of the Internet
Dark Horse Sense
How This Ends

MEH TIER
The Lay of King David
Poetry
Dream Envoy

SHIT TIER
The Collector
Non-Polish Technical

Prole:
My laptop got gangraped by a dozen gorillas and now I can't access the tubes from it. Please save this thread and send me a .zip with everthing as soon as you feel that the thread is about to autosage.

>>400207
a dozen gorillas, you say? Interesting.

>will do

If prole isn't on, Lindlair or Caesar please save it for me.
Thanks and good night.

>>400117
also this

k gone

>>400206
I wonder how Iong wiII it take for the first fanarts start appearing...

>>400258
I dunno, but those farming airships sound kind of cool.

>>400258
oh god noooo

>rule 34

>>400258
SUMMON THE DRAWFAGS!

>>400268

DAT ZINE

>>400268
Seeing as a few of the stories are already pornographic, I don't see how much worse it can get.

(inb4 hot SICKman on ISEEYOU stalker on Darte three-way action)

>>400298

HOW ABOUT A CLOUD JIZZING ON LITTLE GIRLS?

INBE4PEDOBEAR

>>400287
you really don't want to do that

>>399806

Am I missing something? There's no download link on the page.

Seriously, we should lynch the author of The Collector.

>>400315

>>400315
It's the big underlined orange text which says "Download The Inaugural Issue".

Clicking the picture works too.

good question

>>400315
right click link -> save as...

>>400316
Or... try to give him helpful advice?

>>400298
>hot SICKman on ISEEYOU stalker on Darte three-way action

>>400328
there is nothing you could to do make that story interesting. Or even readable. I think lynching is the only course of action.

>>400324
>>400322

Bahaha. Sorry about that guys. I was using Chrome, which wasn't recognizing the link. Another reason why Firefox is better.

>>400334
>>400298
Since none of those three are described in much detail, it'd be mostly up to the artist's imagination.

Fuck, is Darte even human?

The Collector wasn't that shitty... just meh.

>>400353
Does it make a difference on threesomes?

>Chrome wasn't recognizing the link

FFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

>>400353
Doesn't say, I think SS is deliberately being incredibly vague about time and space.

All you can really draw from it is "crops exist, huge orbital mirrors exist, dams exist, self-repairing flying robot elephant tractors exist, water exists, and some dude called Darte exists who has kids and sunburns easily."

>>400353
>Fuck, is Darte even human?
all this and moar in the next episode of ZWG digest

>>400365
You'd be amazed.

>>400371

>FUUUUUUUUUUU

Yeah, sorry to be the bearer of bad news bro.

>>400353
I feel almost compelled to write deliberately-terrible parody pornfic of these three now.

>>400381

PLEASE EDITORS
Ask >>400206 god and top tier authors to make sequels and somehow please include it on the second issue!

I'm so happy this worked out well ;3 we're having lots of love and interest here.
Thank you, editors <3

>>400394

OH GOD NO. SEQUELS ARE HORRIBLE... 90% OF THE TIME

>>400408
reallllyyy?

>>400408
Not Disney sequels... Let's just say they should extend their work.

>>400416

How about they... make new works? Hmm?

>>400394
How exactly do you follow any of those up?

Sick: Decaying corpse of lunatic decays.
Revolution: Protagonist plays the game again like a retard, loses with first trigger pull.
Polefag: "I'm still Polish, here's some more Polish jokes. Less about magnetism, though."
ISEEYOU: Catches her, sticks it in the pooper.
Second Sunset: Somebody says something.

>>400421
inb4 conservadorism in a five hour-old publication.

>>400426
WHOA NIGGA THEM BE SPOILERS?

btw, how many of you in this thread are fan of this idea, and how many are featured authors?

>>400426
>Second Sunset: Somebody says something.

>>400426
>Second Sunset: Somebody says something.

>>400436
>>400440
Don't get me wrong, I really liked Sunset, I'm just more used to stories with... dialogue. And characters. And plots.

>>400431
the idea seems fine with me, and I'm sure their authors would all be interested in contributing to the zine after the attention they've been given.

We'll just send'em e-mails with transcripts of any praise ITT

>>400449
send an email to the author of The Collector filled with viruses and hatred.

I may be an author of a particularly popular story, and I may have already submitted another work that I may have been told will be in the second issue.

So you may be pleased with the results.

Revolution's sequel could talk about the aftermatch.

>>400461
TELL US, FAGGOT.
Are you God Tier or Top Tier?

>>400461
Or I may not.

>>400461
if you're the author of The Collector, then I hate you.

>>400461
or you may not be any of these authors at all..

hmmm

>>400469
differentfag. i'm the author of The Collector. and haven't heard any constructive criticism...

guess i'll give up then.

>>400474
there is nothing we can construct out of your work.
please stop.

>>400472

It seems we are at an impasse.

>>400474

Uhh. Just read over the work yourself. Then ask yourself, "What is bad about this piece of work?" Once you've figured that out, you should be able to fix it.

Shouldn't be hard if you read good works often.

>>400474
It wasn't so bad. Haters gonna hate, but your could give your work a little polish by reading some web tutorials :3

>>400426
Second Sunset 2 would just be a two thousand word description of a mushroom cloud.

>>400490
>"What is bad about this piece of work?"
there is no plotline and everything is boring and terrible.
the end.

>>400515
what are we talking about here, that fucking farm piece?

What kind of 'technical' stuff would people like to read? Literary criticism? Philosophy?

>>400498
That'd fit quite well stylistically, given that the first was fifteen hundred about a wheatfield.

ZWG guys, are you planning to do anything with your wiki?

>>400518
the one about the Filipino guy buying purple things from eBay

>>400518

That's right. It was retitled as Second Sunset or w/e.

>>400520

Anything interesting would be excellent.

>>400518
Best be trolling nigger

>>400530

> That's right. It was retitled as Second Sunset or w/e.

Looks like I was wrong. :<

>>400530
Interesting as in? I've written critical essays about poetry, but I think people might find it boring as fuck, considering genre fiction is getting all the praise it seems (and not without good reason).

>>400539
Explain yourself.

>>400526
I personally plan to turn it into a soul-sucking black hole of doom and despair, devoid of all life save the occasional deep-space kraken.

>ask somebody else, I've got no Idea. Lindlar is the "keeper" of the wiki right now.

>>400526
They're going to use the wiki to register the authors so people can get in touch with them.

>>400541

Well, I can't force you to write a damn FF7 essay, can I? Just write about something that you find interesting and hope that others will find it to be interesting as well.

Of course, that entirely depends on your writing ability. If you're good enough, then you should be able to make Mein Kamph or Ten Masters of Element (w/e the title was[Also, I thought the reviewer did a good job, but that's just me]) sound amazing.

>>400563
>brackets and parentheses

>>400549

Thought he was asking what Second Sunset was when the greentext actually went to Collector.

I just finished Revolution. Really good story.

>>400567
>([brackets] and parentheses)

>>400571
Sounded like you were calling "that fucking farm piece" terrible. Which will not do.

(no plot I'll give you, though)

>>400579
that's not how it works.

God damn this is such a good idea.

>>400583
appreciated, anon.

>>400582

>(whine)

ITT Proof that, if you force something long enough, 4chan will love it no matter how terrible it is

>>400597
Ah! Our first catch of the day.

>>400597

hatersbehatin.jpg

I saved this story from early /r9k/ while looking for stories to submit.. I feel this is as good a thread as any to share it in.

Diary of a !/loser8mc by anon on /r9k/

I should be sleeping. It's 5 AM. A dog is barking. This has been going on for a month already. But what should I do? I'll manage. I try to ignore the dog. I can't. I imagine how it'd feel like to kill it. Get my folding knife, throw in the window and slice open its throat. Blood all over the floor. I saw the dogs owner once, its a woman. I couldn't do it. I don't want to hurt her. I don't want people to think I'm crazy. Thinking about the woman, I get hard. Or maybe I already was, I can't remember. But such things happen in the morning. I decide to get up.

My stomach hurts. I ate too much last sunday. I ordered food online and when it arrived, it was way past my bedtime. I couldn't sleep after that. I try to eat some fruit. It looks funny. I eat it anyway.

I smoke a cigarette and browse 4chan. Somehow it comforts me. I grab the ice cream I left in the fridge, Haagen-Dasz, caramel. It mixes with the taste of cigarettes in my mouth. I smoke a cigarette.

I'm still hard. I masturbate to some japanese porn. It's a virtual date, the girl is pretending to be your girlfriend. I can't masturbate to real porn anymore. I'm totally indifferent to a womans body. The girl in the movie is resting in the boys lap. I imagine how holding her head between my legs would feel. I like hair. I bet she smells nice.

I come. It's not satisfying. It flows all over my hand and into my pubes. I smell it. It's not white, it's completely clear, like water. I pull up my underpants and browse my japanese-porn-release forum. Shit. Bondage and anal movies. I can't masturbate to that.

I smoke a cigarette. My stomach aches from the ice cream I ate. I have to go to the toilet. There is pee on the floor. I don't know how it got there. I sit down. I smell the pee. Slight diarrhea.

I browse 4chan again and my stomach still hurts. I want to go to sleep. Dream the day away. Wake up in the evening. I enter my bedroom. I hear the dog.

I smoke a cigarette. Then I have to go to the toilet, my stomach still hurts. Smell the pee. I get into the shower.

Showering is the only time I feel safe. It's warm. I want to go away. To a far away land, sit in a hot spring. Far away. Watch the snow fall in a hot spring. I feel loved in the shower. The water warms me, without even wanting something in return. I cry. There is poo in my shower. Just a little. Now my foot stinks. No one will smell it, why should I care? It's silly, it happens to everybody, right? I should laugh about it. I don't.

I want to go to bed. The dog. I smoke a cigarette. I browse a site for game releases. I can't seem to get enjoyment out of video games anymore. They are made for children, I'm not a child anymore. I wish I was, though. I grab my legs and rest my head on them. I listen to music, Bob Dylan, "Sara". It's the most depressing song I know. I browse tokyo-toshokan, the new anime releases suck. I used to like anime. Still 3 hours until my classes start. I start writing this.


Sit in my chair and listen to Bob Dylan as the time passes. It's raining outside.

I get dressed to go to my classes. I want to eat at the cafeteria, I hate it there but I can't cook. Look in the mirror, I look like shit. My eyes are black, I got acne because of the sleep deprivation. I look at myself for half an hour. It only gets worse. I could shower again, maybe I'll look better then. I don't have the time. I go to the computer, I can't eat because the class starts in ten minutes. I look at the mirror again, I have to go.

>>400608
>Haagen-Dasz, caramel.

FUCK YOU REMINDED OF MY ADDICTION IN HAAGEN-DASZ AUGIYBFUTDYBFNDYFDLIYG

>>400624
good job completely fucking ruining everything forever.

>>400608
>>400614
>>400617
>>400624
send this to zinewritersguild@gmail.com godomot

I watch television, the Simpsons. I watched that episode so many times, I can even finish some sentences. I don't know why they still show it. I watch Spongebob. I want to live like him, without worries. How can he stay so childish? Sometimes I feel I'm still a child too, a sad one. I eat a banana. Sometimes when I buy bananas, I wonder if the cashier thinks I'm doing dirty stuff with it. I have. But it hurts.

I masturbate for half an hour, this time it feels good. It's 8 PM. I go to bed. Listen to music, read a book. The book is about buddhism. I want to become detached of the world like buddha. I want to stop feeling. I act like I don't care about feelings. Calm. But I don't. Maybe if I meditate enough, my feelings will go away. I don't meditate, I did in the past, but I don't anymore. What's the point? I don't care anymore. I finish two pages in the book and I don't want to continue. I listen to music with the lights out. I once collected music with a passion. Now I listen to the same stuff every night, just out of habit.

I imagine how it would be to have super powers, like superman. I could just fly away. I'd jump out of buildings and people would admire me for my powers. I could safe the world even. Maybe from aliens. All sorts of important people would come to me and thank me for my help, maybe a girl too. A super hero can't be lonely. I fall asleep with my earphones on.

I hear a dog.

(the end)

>>400632

I didn't write it so I can't submit it to be published.

>>400644
If it was posted as anon, submit it as anon.

we're all anon here, anon.

>>400635
>the life story of just about every 4chan user.

truth

>>400651

posted as diary of (loser tripcode here)

but yeah, I'll submit my own story. If you really want to publish it go for it, but I'm not going to submit someone's story for them. Not to be an e/lit/ist douche, I just don't feel comfortable submitting it.

>>400426
>>400498
these ideas please me.

>>400662
protip: someone else will submit it anyway

>>400662
understandable. Still, we'll look forward to recieving something from you in the future

alright folks, 3 more minutes before I go to bed and e-mail this thread to Goldensox. If you've got any good ideas you've been holding back, nows the time to spill'em

>>400690
Sleep well, warrior.

>>400696
adios

>>400426
Sick writefag here. I honestly can't imagine a sequel, but I appreciate the thought. I submitted something else entirely for the next issue.

Begin Shameless Self Promotion:
I have a bunch of other unpolished stories, and I welcome criticism on them; it really helps when I go to edit and finalize the pieces later
http://thejosefkstories.blogspot.com/

And thanks again for the kind words, and the great venue.

>>400712
I request you, Darrin and Levett collaborate to bring us gay, stalkery, cannibalistic (possibly xenophiliac) threesome erotica.

>>400721
Dialogue, as noted, will not be necessary.

>>400721
And by darrin I mean biscuits.

fuck i'm tired

>>400721
i can't help but think this may not be the best use of someones time... But its kind of cool.

and to think people would shit on this idea constantly, I'm proud.

What'd y'all think of "The only night"? I don't give a shit about the (untitled) one i wrote.

>>400869

I like sushi, so fuck you lol

>>400901
I really don't know why people like it so much, It's not that tasty lol. Although i live in Texas so i might not be getting the best.

>fix my damn faucet
I lol'd.

I want to write for you guys.
How do this?

Lest I be considered an attention whore, I just want to slip out quickly and say thanks for the praise. I did this for motivation, and that's just what I got. Even being Top Tier (as one anon put it) gives me something to strive for. I thank you, and good night.

I'm the author of The Collector. It's been my first foray into relatively lengthy writing, and I'm sorry if it's not to your taste. Since a lot of you are in consensus with regard to its quality, I would like to know what I can improve on the next time I write a short story. Granted, you think that it's bad - thanks for that critique, but are there any specifics as to why you guys absolutely hated it? I'm glad I published it so that I can polish my work next time, but I'm sorry that it saddened or angered a lot of you.

Thank you for reading.

>>400937
you got some balls

So why was there a review for Final Fantasy 7 on the first issue?

>>400937
I think there are too many commas, but it is a nice story and I think you're brave to have published it in ZWG. Try to work a little more on the dialouge, it seems kind of forced.

I wish I had time to read all of the work now :( What I did read was the stuff by Josef K.--man, Sick was awesome and I'll definitely be following your blog!
I'm halfway through The Collector--I couldn't contain my curiosity because of all the bashing here (I'm a bad person...)... well, I don't think I'll finish it, it's long, boring and seems to lack structure and some sort of driving force. Still, the writing is not utterly horrible, so the author should keep trying! But man, it's fucking bold to take the title of a Fowles novel and publish it under a name which is a title of a Faulkner novel. Fucking bold.
Looking forward to reading Locked Up.
Also, one of you classified my submission as God Tier--thanks! I didn't submit to the next issue because I didn't know there was a deadline but I may come up with something for the 3rd or 4th.

/lit/izens been bigging up Poletard. It made me laugh; they ain't wrong.

>>401066
Thanks :)

>>399806

Now I've seen something productive from this zine it is likely I will submit something for the next issue.

However, some of the submissions could have done with some basic corrections.

Technical stuff: what did you think of the font? Personally, I find serif fonts much easier to read.

>>400928
zinewritersguild@gmail.com

>>400926
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>>401081
I liked it better in the first editions, with Palatino Linotype.

Second Sunset writer here. Thanks for the compliments, I'm really glad you guys seem to like it. I have another quite different piece going into the third issue, which I hope will please anon too.

Does anyone have anything particularly negative to say about it? The lack of any sort of plot or dialogue is intentional, I'm mostly wondering if my writing style is any good.

>>400298
I would be tempted if I were capable of writing porn and if that weren't a horrible horrible idea.
>>400353
I didn't actually decide one way or another whether Darte was human or not, or where or when any of the story was happening. It didn't seem necessary, and I'm lazy. As >>400372 noticed there's very little that's solid in the story.

>>401150
>>400712
>>400934
You guys are great and should feel great.

>>400937
Surprising you didn't hide to save face.

>>401206
Guess the kid's actually honest about wanting to improve. I know if my piece had been torn apart I'd be hiding.

>>401206
>>401212
I made a thread about it. It's hard keeping track with what all the people are saying against my story, so I made a thread where you can pour all your imprecations on me.

Thanks.

>>401206
Give the guy a break... His writing is crap, but not hopeless. As I wrote before, I think his biggest crime is that Fowles/Faulkner faggotry.

Sup.

Mine is the first full-formed story I've written in years so if anyone wants to throw any constructive abuse my way then please do. It all helps.
Personally I think the plot meanders and the characters are quite flat. Probably sent it in too soon.

Wow, the thread is still on... And full of love <3

>>401222
It was quite good IMO.

>>401230
Thanks :)
But I was surprised it ended up on the cover, tbh. I'm a lot happier with what I'm sending into you next.

WHY THIS HASN'T BEEN STICKIED YET?
MODS WAKE UP

>>401237
Sent a mail to moot requesting to make Goldensox and Prole mods.

>>401237
Because we don't give a shit. Honestly it hasn't even been discussed. /lit/ isn't exactly top priority.

>>401237
This.

But what's with the proliferation of namefags?

>>401222
>>401222
Worst aspect of it, I think, was the jarring contrast between the generally florid high-fantasy tone and occasional spots of much more modern, prosaic writing:
>it was a fucking man.
>"Huh," said the king

Both were good on their own, but mixed didn't work out well at all. Plot could have been a bit tighter, yeah, but wasn't bad.

>>401245
This would be a fucking horrible idea.
>>401247
Authors wanting recognition, can't really blame them.

>>401235
Maybe we'll drop the titles on the front page on the second issue, but I dunno, it's up to anon to choose.

>>401246
;<

This was surprisingly not shitty. Well done, chaps.

>>401248
Thank you! I was hoping the blend would make it more palatable for anyone to read, rather than just my fellow fantasyfags. Point taken though. Definitely something I'll be wary of in future.

>>401263
This. I had also been expecting more crap.

>>401245
>implying giving more credit and power to the "publishers" of the zine would be beneficial. INB4 they ban dissenters.

>>401266
I prefer the more gritty approach to fantasy, especially given the subject matter, but both are good as long as you keep it consistent. (Also, laughed at "it's complicated.")

Did you notice any problems with mine?

>>399806
Wow, it isn't shit.

Maybe I'll submit something later...

>my face when my submission of well known copyrighted material is in the zine

>>401279
Uh...

>>401276
So do I, tbh. Calling this a failed experiment and moving on.

I'm only just pouring through it, myself. It was released pretty late here and I went to bed before the third revision was out. Which one is yours? I'll skip to it now.

>>401283
"Second Sunset." Are you Europe-based too, then? Brazilian release times meant not much sleep last night...

Is your next submission going to be more fantasy?

I'll submit some of my stuff. Probably too shitty though.

>>401287
Indeed. Britfag here. I'll read your work right now.

And yeah, the next one is more of a parodic deconstruction of the swords and sorcery genre (could I sound more pretentious about a Conan spoof? D:), but one that I'm hoping stays faithful to the spirit of it - tone definitely errs more on the side of gritty than flowery.

>>401305
Forgot my trip. Posting without it elsewhere.

>>401305
Britfag here too, Bristol/Birmingham based. This thread is my first ever namefagging, hopefully I won't need to use a trip. Looking forward to your spoof.

>>401304
Go ahead and do it, I wasn't certain about my story but got some really useful feedback from the editors and Anon has been amazingly encouraging.