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    86 KB Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:17 No.600888  
    Heya, First of all: Yes I know it's "manga" but It's for a manga bookstore, they have a contest to make a mascotte for them.


    So, what can I change?

    Contstructive Critique please.
    >> luda 02/15/10(Mon)09:23 No.600896
    Save yourself the embarrassment.

    It's sloppily done. Learn to color inside the lines.
    Flat, silly color choices. Add more depth.
    Use reference. Look up some japanese school uniforms.
    Learn2anatomy. Study drapery. Color theory.
    Why would you do this
    Why
    >> BEE 02/15/10(Mon)09:27 No.600897
    Reminds me of lefty.

    It's better than Lefty's, ahahahaha.

    Okay, first of, well, fuck. Stop drawing anime, learn the rules of anatomy before you break 'em!

    Folds on the right of the skirt defy gravity, legs are bending (She have boneitis?), knees need more definition. Eh.

    Just learn some anatomy then try this some other time.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:27 No.600898
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    >>600896
    Colours are the same as the logo of the company.

    Drawing attachted to this message won last time.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:28 No.600899
    OP here, it is not finished yet, I ask feedback to I can change it.
    >> luda 02/15/10(Mon)09:31 No.600900
    >>600898
    Then use them more tastefully.
    Nicer shades. Don't make excuses.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:34 No.600902
    >>600900
    Can you give some more advice?
    >> Guy !pRqJctqU3c 02/15/10(Mon)09:40 No.600905
    >Heya, First of all: Yes I know it's "poo" but It's for a toilet, the poos have a contest to make a mascotte for them.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:43 No.600907
    >>600905
    WOW, YOU ARE HILARIOUS!
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:43 No.600908
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    >>600888
    The silhouette is nice but the line of motion is a little awkward and could be pushed more I bet. Also, the line quality is quite terrible -- it is all one width and is very scratchy looking (see leg on our left) and while you tried to add shadows and highlights, you didn't push them enough to make a difference.

    Also, what's up with those pleats? I went ahead and used a trick I learned from Sailor Moon fanart tutorials when I was a kid
    >> GreyDeath 02/15/10(Mon)09:46 No.600912
    You need some form for the legs, they look like 2 tree trunks at the moment. You can make the light source coming from the book and sparklies to make it exciting.
    >> Guy !pRqJctqU3c 02/15/10(Mon)09:48 No.600913
    >>600907

    ty
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)09:59 No.600917
    >>600908
    >>600912
    Thanks for the comments, I'll use them for sure.
    >> BEE 02/15/10(Mon)10:02 No.600921
    >>600912
    Yes, leg bones don't bend like that
    >> Lefty 02/15/10(Mon)10:05 No.600925
    >>600897
    oh BEE you have such a hardon for me

    kkyaaaa~~!!!!
    >> BEE 02/15/10(Mon)10:06 No.600926
    >>600925
    Y-yeah...
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)10:22 No.600935
    Make it a perspective shot, it would a LOT more powerful.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)10:26 No.600939
    >>600935
    u has exampel?
    >> Guy !pRqJctqU3c 02/15/10(Mon)10:48 No.600956
    DERPY DOO DERPY DOO WHY DON'T YOU PUT ONE LEG ON HER HEAD AND TURN THE OTHER LEG INTO A HELICOPTER

    ADD SOME STREAKY BLOTCHES TO HER FACE FOR TRUE SUPERHEROIC POWER

    COAT HER LEG STUMPS IN RANDOM SHINY RED SPOTS TO ALLOW HER TO FLY
    >> BEE 02/15/10(Mon)10:58 No.600961
    >>600956
    Jesus Christ
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)11:02 No.600962
    >>600956

    I bet your are a fat, 35 year old guy who still lives with his parents. And you only give critique to get a bigger e-penis. You hope you will be reconized by other "Anon" but we all hate you.


    Go hang yourself you pretentious pig.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)11:36 No.600985
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    >>600905

    Haha. Oh guy, you. (Seriously I thought it was funny. Fuck you guys)

    >>600898

    DAT LEG
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)11:38 No.600986
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    >>600962

    TROLLED HARD
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)11:42 No.600988
    >>600986
    >>600985
    That's a new trick right there, Guy!
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)11:50 No.600994
    >>600988

    Oh boy not this shit again. Not everyone who doesn't get easily trolled by Guy is Guy, you know. I've been on to his antics for like three months now. I laugh at you dipshits who rage at him over and over.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)11:53 No.600998
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    >>600939
    I was thinking something along these lines.


    (Please don't copy, it's filled with errors.)
    >> Guy !pRqJctqU3c 02/15/10(Mon)11:54 No.601001
    >>600988

    fag for brains
    >> Lefty 02/15/10(Mon)12:00 No.601012
    >>600998
    aww thats so cute
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)12:13 No.601029
    >>601012

    I think I just threw up in my mouth a little.
    >> Anonymous 02/15/10(Mon)12:55 No.601067
    >>600888
    hey OP, this seems like a perfect opportunity to troll the bookstore. why dont you hand this to /b/. they'll come up with something im sure

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