Legs should be shorter than torso etc.

His arms and posture look extremely unnatural! Is he supposed to be slouching or stretching or something? Hands can be hard, but please try a little harder! The one to our right isn't really even a hand, just fingers sprouting from the wrist!

The pic in >>308162 is a good starting point

...Donna?

Those feet made me lol.

OP here. Thanks for all the advice. The diagram helped a lot! And yes, 308233, you're right about the hands. I've made some slight changes...
308231: I also tried to make the legs shorter than torso thing, but he ended up looking very deformed. But I understood the point, since retro characters often have short legs. It just won't work on this guy.

Any more crits would be greatly appreciated!

PS: Not sure what "Donna" means, or what I should do about the feet, No.308262.

>>308265
What exactly do you mean by retro? Retro what? A retro car is different to a retro coffee table. This a retro what?

Also, to reply to a certain post, you don't need to type >No.308262
or whichever person, just click on the actual number you want to reply to and it will automatically show up in your reply box. Read the FAQ and lurk the fuck more, NEWFAG!

>>308273
> >No.308262
I see the irony.

>cater to both genders and different kinds of sexual preferences

I don't think so buddy.

Also, your drawing:
1. torso is squished down. What's up with the scar down the stomach? C-section?
2. arms are too short
3. face is too wide.
4. length of the thigh and shin very uneven (there should be equal amount of leg below and under the knee)
5. center of gravity is way off. He's about to fucking fall over.

>>308273
Thanks for the advice! I didn't know I could do that. As for retro, I mean the retro art drawing style. I don't want to list specific artists/works, since I don't want critiques based on how successfully I copied someone else's art. But retro art can be anything from Venture Bros to Dexter's Lab to those E-surance commercials...I just don't want to copy any of those sources.


>>308280
Thanks for the advice! It was very helpful. I'll post the revised work once it's done. You may not like my idea, yet I only create things I'd play myself. I love dating sims, and I've played quite a few. My main gripe is lack of variety, especially with gender and sexual-orientation. My main goal is to offer some variety with my work. This doesn't mean everyone will like it--- just that it will just be a different kind of challenge. And I love those! Thanks for your advice.

>>308308
Nope, still don't get what you mean by retro. I've never heard of "the retro art drawing style", mainly because it does not exist. As far as retro art is concerned unless you put a bit more specific. Retro is basically short for retrospective. Your picture is not retrospective cave painting, nor is it a retrospective of a baroque oils....what exactly is this "retro" retrospective of. What I'm trying to tell you is that "retro" is an adjective.

>>308318
Retro is an art style. You can either hit google images with that keyword. Source:
http://www.howtodrawhowtopaint.com/images/howtodraw/HowToDraw/how%20to%20draw%20new%20retro%20style%
20characters%20christopher%20hart%20search%20picture%20image%20isbn%200823005879.jpg

>>308343
>Christopher Hart
OH U

you might want to look up some images of "retro" as you call it, because judging by the face of your halfnekkid dude, this is anime.

>>308343
lol I saw this book on /rs/ and wretched a little bit.

Legs WAY too long. His right hand is a bit strange looking too. Pretty decent otherwise.

Avoid that terrible "new retro" book and look at real vintage cartoons and illustrations. Al Capp, Osamu Tezuka, cheap MAD Magazine paperbacks, and vintage Golden Books, all have strong vintage imagery.
http://www.animationarchive.org/2008/04/illustration-visual-feast.html
http://todaysinspiration.blogspot.com/
http://johnkstuff.blogspot.com/

All of their styles, and there are so many, can be incorporated into modern illustration.

Thanks for all the advice. I've tried to follow it.
Here's version 3.
Any crit is greatly appreciated!

>>308635
it looks exactly the same as before.

where the fuck is his right knee?

It's not the same at all. Open the windows side by side. Or paste one over the other.

k im not the best but here's my advice.

If you're planning on making a dating sim, you might want to either a) hire a new artist, or b) learn how to balance your figures.

Feet are there to hold your body weight. Plant the feet on the ground, and make it appear as if they're bearing the weight of your character. There are other flaws as well, but the feet are so distracting right now.

>>308652
That's not advice. That's a putdown...

>>308704
Are you kidding? I was being nice by /ic/ standards.

>>308704

how is that a put down?

OP, you need you some learnin' on CENTER OF BALANCE.