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!pkzejWGkfw 05/01/10(Sat)19:16 No.34226793  What,
already done?
No choices at all, this storytelling style would have
benefited from using the whole screen for text instead of just the
textbox. Makes the lack of character art far more obvious.
It's a
short story, no interactivity. Like I said, feels awkward at times, but
it comes through in the end, it tells the story and makes you care
about it. If I would add anything would be to flesh out the
conversations. The first interaction with Rachel was pretty good, but
the rest is just "we talked", including the chat with the Bus Driver
which could have made for a powerful scene, get to know better the
character, and eventually give a reason why the ending is that way.
If
one thing, this is an accomplishment as telling a story with so few
elements. 3 songs, a couple background pictures, but it's still good.
Overall,
I enjoyed it. Could use some work to stand on its own, but for what it
appears to be, a quick story without much development sweat going into
it, it's pretty nice. |
